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Literature Text

All I see is you,
The beauty of your face illuminates
My days, my nights, my life.
All I want is you,
Your warmth, your touch, your love.
All I need is you,
Your support, your comprehension.  
You are my reason of survival
So, darling, please, stay with me.
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louisdragon109's avatar
I know you were trying to create emphasis with the "All I ... is you" every two lines, but since the other lines don't rhyme together it just comes off as a hit and miss for me.

Don't take this personally, it is just my very humble opinion.